Episode 7: The Grand Rapids O'Reillys
Written by Bennett The Sage Monday, 20 July 2009 01:00
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07.19.2009 - 21:18 | TheWesleyInRed - Just a thought
You seem to have confused pronoun with proper noun.
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10.12.2009 - 11:55 | QuestionTheMajority
I was going to say something about that. Glad someone else pointed it out.
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07.19.2009 - 21:21 | communismfairy
To be honest I think the show peaked after the squirrel king halo story. Every episode after that has just been one gimmick after another. I totally understand that you're trying to keep the concept from getting stale but the show is suffering from your attempts to create running jokes or random crossovers. Don't get me wrong I love this series and also appreciate what you are trying to do but please try to make your next few reviews as close to the original formula as possible. Don't worry you've only had seven episodes, the idea isn't stale yet. All that said KANSAS CITY MISSOURI was absolutely amazing

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07.20.2009 - 00:00 | Evil Betty
"Penty-coastal" too.
Maybe the mispronounciations were intentional, to keep the fanfic more interesting.
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07.19.2009 - 21:22 | DanManX
Oy, the depths some people will go in the "bad writing" department...makes me cry.
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07.19.2009 - 21:55 | zakkro
Hm, it was... bad, I guess. But not nearly as bad as the earlier ones.
P.S. do you take any requests? If so, there's a terrible, terrible, terrible fanfiction that would be hilarious if you reviewed it

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07.19.2009 - 21:55 | Seng
Do the writers of these actually think this is good? This is an insult to the English language. I know SquirrelKing means for his to be bad but idk about the others.
I think it would be cool if the Sage did do a good fanfiction one every once in awhile but I guess that wouldn't really be as funny.
I am still really confused what this fanfiction is actually talking about or the point of it but I guess there really isn't one.
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07.19.2009 - 21:50 | DeathsHead419 - ...Um
right, I think humanity may be doomed. Great job Sage, and I...v'e got nothin more. What a disturbing story and plug for the next episode.
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07.19.2009 - 22:05 | Deimos1984rd - WHY?
I can't stand it, this fanfic has driven me insane, my head hurts...
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07.19.2009 - 22:18 | Helosie - What...
Why the hell would you want to write fanfic for M.A.S.H. WHY!?
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07.19.2009 - 22:20 | shadow90
has anyone seen a plot around here because it wasnt in the story
from the first word it just dragged on and on and on. hope the next one comes out soon.
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07.19.2009 - 23:07 | Sl0th
That... What the hell was that?
How in the name of all that is good and holy could someone write something like that? It read as a cross between a phone book and a geography textbook of the mid-west.
Maybe the fanfic is a journal through which one could chart the author's mental breakdown. The more outlandish the chapters become, the looser the author's grip on reality becomes.
"Epic Voice Guy" was most certainly needed for reading that fanfic.
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07.19.2009 - 23:30 | Noll_UK
Nooooo Not rule 34!!!
I do agree this story is rather crap, but there are some "fans" out there who think they are writers haha
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07.20.2009 - 00:29 | Sieg-sama
This was just aweful and nonesensical...
Maybe it was a blank fanfic sheet and an AI added place names at random?
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07.20.2009 - 00:34 | DoomGuy
I'm kinda looking forward to the next episode
Does that make me a bad person?
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07.20.2009 - 10:50 | TheAtomic
Only if you don't roll your eyes at least once when the story is read.
By the way, didn't this story sound like an itinerary?
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07.20.2009 - 01:36 | Tren
RADAR O RLY
...why do I have the feeling that someone will photoshop the "O RLY" owl onto Radar's head?
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07.20.2009 - 01:59 | Thule
Holy shit. GUIDING LIGHT has a more interesting plot then this. Totally shcitzo!
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07.20.2009 - 02:58 | mwong04
JESUS, this story is ASS! I mean seriously I don't watch this show and I don't know anything about it but what kind of SICK FANTASY is he thinking when writing this
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07.20.2009 - 03:50 | Kazs1492 - Wow
Why are there so many BIG pronouns in this fic?!? Anyway, another GOOD JOB SAGE!!!!

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07.20.2009 - 03:58 | Cferra
Wow. I think I've seen fics like that. People just capitalize words like this:
Harry Went To The Store.
Oh and sometimes I've seen:
MARY PICKED UP THE POKEBALL AND OUT COMES PICKACHU!
So, seeing a story like that sadly doesn't surprise me. Good show, Bennett. I'm...wary about the next one.
Childhood memories being destroyed? That can't be good.
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07.20.2009 - 04:07 | VincentEL
I suppose "Y'all" can be argued as being a pronoun, and "Mulcahy was as follows" appears to be just a random part of a sentence, but unless I failed to pay proper attention, all other cases of uppercaseness were just names. Pronouns are "I", "you", "me", "he", "she", "it", "they", et.c..
Curious how "The Lord Thy God" wasn't all upper case, while nearly all other names of characters, places and establishments were.
Yes, I just posted a comment about grammar while using the word "uppercaseness".
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07.24.2009 - 03:10 | untmdsprt
Your comment about "uppercaseness" got a laugh out of me when I thought the video was so annoying.
You are correct though, pronouns are me, she, I, etc.
Proper nouns are what was in uppercase in the video
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07.20.2009 - 04:27 | serenity9900
Sweet mother of crap, WTF was John Cooper II thinking when he wrote this. Sage I'm surprised you've read as much as you did. I wouldn't have been able to.
"Best be described as a retarded chimpanzee slamming his ass on the keyboard"

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07.20.2009 - 05:02 | JMShearer
One thing I'm waiting to see here on MFT is a game show fanfic, and since Rule 34 was mentioned at the end of this ep, I'm thinking #8 might be the one.
Even as someone who's written, let's face it, some pretty weird fan fiction himself, I have to wonder what the hell some of these authors think they're doing when they even write these things, let alone publish them.
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07.20.2009 - 06:04 | RocMegamanX - Man, that fanfic is annoying.
I certainly wouldn't want you to go insane from all the ALL-CAPS pronouns, so it's understandable that you wanted to quit while you were ahead.
Good thing I never did any fanfiction.
Still, your best episode so far was sort of either the DBZ/Anne Frank one, Squirrel King or the Linkara/Sage crossover.
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07.20.2009 - 06:49 | SSkye
This fanfic is like Pokemon. SQUIRTLE used TACKLE.
I think the worst fic he read was the Raptor one.
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07.22.2009 - 04:09 | serenity9900
I agree...I wanted to pour bleach in my eyes and ears.
I couldn't stop laughing at the word Velocigina
Good thing I never posted any of my fanfiction, lol.
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I am still amazed that YOU managed to get through these bad stories...well here on TGWTG.COM there are many PEOPLE willing to listen to FANFICTION AUTHORS' crap while yelling to their MOTHER.