My Immortal Part I
Written by Bennett The Sage Friday, 25 December 2009 12:05
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12.25.2009 - 12:40 | pharmmajor
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12.27.2009 - 19:19 | 0dd1
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01.11.2010 - 13:54 | Lan
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02.01.2012 - 01:58 | PlayMp1
The worst part is that she isn't even goth, she's the modern definition of emo. Goth kids were an 80s phenomenon - my mom was one. They liked Depeche Mode, The Cure and New Order, not shitty wannabe pop-punk.
I've been a metal fan for a little while (I'm young, so I have no comparison to people who've been in the genre since the beginnings), but every time she dipped back into describing how "fucking goffic" she is, I wanted to shove a marching snare drum stick (the big ones!) through her eye. Maybe a cocktail of Death, Atheist, Bolt Thrower and Morbid Angel would convince how far even the most conventional of extreme music can go.
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02.09.2011 - 00:08 | ladydiskette
Ugh, I know goths who can write better stories than this....just reading the first page of this failfic and I can tell right away she is just nothing but a poser and pretends to be goth because 'hey its the internet who is going to know' the comments and A/N (Author's Notes) are pretty funny to read however.
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An adult man named Todd Gilesbie claims to be the author & that Tara is a character author, like Lemony Snicket. The girls on youtube could be separate trolls trying to cash in on the joke, or Todd put them up to it.
After spending what felt like 2 hours reading the Tropes page for My Immortal, I'm convinced with 0% doubt that it's a troll fic, even without Todd's confession. A hilariously clever one that used every "how NOT to write" point, every goth cliche, & every single Mary Sue trait in the book, then created its own.
If this fic was a CGI movie, it would be The Amazing Bulk, but with a script by the guys who made Disaster Movie, or Adam Sandler pretending to be a hypersexualized dyslexic 11 year old yaoi fangirl from Dubai who's parents let her watch Buffy the Vampire Slayer instead of cartoons. The author is clearly mocking every single thing she claims to be a fan of.
Yeah, that's the supposed backstory for the author. A tough pill to swallow. Tara is just a fictional character made as a mocked personification of teenaged zealot fans.
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Tara claims to be Dyslexic. Real Dyslexics tend to use the correct letters & scramble them as well as scramble the order the words go in, they also misspell the word the same way every time. This story's text is misspelt intentionally.
Tara is also the textbook definition of a "poser" & is clearly mocking everything she claims to be a fan of. She also says she hates Hillary Duff, but let it slip that she watches her movies.
I also find it hard to believe that a person like Tara could actually read Lord of the Rings.
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12.25.2009 - 12:50 | Smarty
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12.25.2009 - 12:55 | The Z
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12.25.2009 - 20:18 | FriendlyLocalFangirl
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08.12.2010 - 12:23 | carnage81Lol right there with you man, mine dropped cause after I heard this I had to bang my head against the wall repeatedly until i forgot all about this story.
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12.27.2009 - 08:35 | veggen
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12.25.2009 - 12:58 | wargamer
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12.25.2009 - 21:59 | Ender
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12.26.2009 - 01:38 | glu
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02.09.2011 - 00:21 | ladydiskette
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12.25.2009 - 13:05 | SomeGuyWithShadesThis fan-fic would only be good if you were extremely drunk, high on every drug known to man and retarded all at the same time. If your not all these things you get a brain tumor...and 3 STDs
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12.25.2009 - 13:33 | The Goth
I'm sorry to announce that before I departed from the public highschool to never return again, I knew two girls who thought that this fanfiction was good and "romantic". Then again, these two girls were also fans of brokeNCYDE and the entire Twilight series. See a connection?
No, I'm not making a joke. I know they were serious (I grew up with them, after all, but kind of stopped being friends after they went down the wall-licking dumb path)
Oh, and that line from Dumbledore combined with the picture made me laugh harder than anything has in a while. Although this whole fanfic is full of out of place lines, this is, like, equal to "You're the man now, dog!" from Sean Connery or "I was fro-zen to-day!" from Christopher Lloyd.
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12.25.2009 - 20:19 | FriendlyLocalFangirl
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03.25.2010 - 23:29 | TheThreadWeaverWho would want to survive?
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06.26.2010 - 17:13 | Sean Strife
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08.04.2013 - 15:08 | KingKaor555
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12.25.2009 - 13:22 | Captain_Smack-Pigeon
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12.25.2009 - 13:31 | Epsilon'I felt a little depressed then, so I slit my wrists'
That has to be the best line in the story which I can fully relate to after hearing even a little bit of this story
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12.26.2009 - 21:22 | FriendlyLocalFangirl
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12.25.2009 - 13:56 | FreelandThat was glorious. Author notes were the best part.
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12.25.2009 - 13:59 | joey_falconettisage amy lee is the hottest woman ever, it's just a fact.
anyway sage is fun
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12.25.2009 - 14:16 | FingerBangI have no idea how you manage to read the author's notes so well without actually going insane. I would love to see the outtakes.
Did Tara Gilesbie actually attend school at all?
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08.20.2010 - 18:47 | theSnark
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12.25.2009 - 14:18 | pharmmajor
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12.25.2009 - 14:41 | krolini... i died a little inside, this is the most vile piece of shit ever written
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12.25.2009 - 15:12 | Arebe
Aha..ahaha..hahahaaaaaaa. ..
Sorry, that only happens when I hear horrible spelling, coupled with more then fairly bad excuses for being a bad writer.
My favorite parts were where the author had to tell people to stop retorting to her piece of...work (shit), after each chapter, as the reasons she were providing were never explained in the story.
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12.25.2009 - 15:14 | dazza1008:0 My God - I can't believe you read that. It's much worse to read than it is to hear.
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12.25.2009 - 15:19 | eviljim
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It's... (ellipses) so bad. I can't believe it o_o
I can't see how it would be even readable without the author's spell-checking friend, seeing how the "author's comments" are.
I'd say the worst part of this is probably irrational categorizing. How can you mix MCR and Good Charlotte with Goths. How can you mix Goths with Satanists?
And most importantly, how the hell do you add Slipknot to this scheme?!
Still, listening to you spew this horrible crap out of your mouth gave me a couple good laughs, mostly because I couldn't believe myself, sitting behind the screen watching it, but also the cracking comments.
Should I say 'thanks'? I doubt it. Merry Christmas anyway, Sage.
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12.25.2009 - 15:25 | Quidam
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12.25.2009 - 15:30 | zelah, my immortal. a classic work of modern literature!
... i feel bad for you, sage D:
you can't deny the hilarity though.
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01.03.2010 - 00:51 | ThatCreepAtYourWindowModern literature...
More like shiterature.
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12.25.2009 - 15:46 | MiriamG
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12.25.2009 - 15:51 | wuza
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12.25.2009 - 16:08 | Altoman5
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12.25.2009 - 16:36 | VelocirapscallionAs you read this I slowly started to die inside and I think I lost my mind. I've not heard of this before, this is so gut wrenchingly awful. How did you read this without going inside?
Wait, didn't she put cross earrings in. Wouldn't that kill her?
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12.25.2009 - 16:22 | benzaie
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12.26.2009 - 23:09 | Yosswell
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08.20.2010 - 18:44 | theSnark
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12.25.2009 - 16:52 | Argerorlux
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08.20.2010 - 18:45 | theSnark
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12.25.2009 - 17:03 | KDHeartI've been waiting for this ever since you started doing this series. :evil:
There is nothing I can say or do to make up for the pain you've probably went through. You are officially my hero.
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12.25.2009 - 17:04 | wargarurumonthat bitch doesn't want to write the word cross. It's official she's a retarded poser :angry:
and its hilarious how she calls other people posers when she brings a new meaning to the word poser :D
and what the hell was up with count chocula :silly:
good luck with the next part sage
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12.25.2009 - 17:44 | Lorki
Summaries
Chapter 1: This is how I look and Draco said hi.
Chapter 2: This is how my friend and I look and Draco asked me out.
Chapter 3: This is how Draco and I look and we went to a concert.
Chapter 4: This his how I took off what we were wearing and got caught by a swearing Dumbledor.
Chapter 5: Teachers told them it was okay and this is how I look.
Chapter 6: This is how Harry and I look.
Chapter 7: This is how we had sex and something happened with a tattoo... > .> no freaking clue what
Chapter 8: Draco apparently was with Vampire who was Harry and Hermione is there and she is also a vampire.... yeah... > ___>
Chapter 9: Voldemort wants me to kill Vampire
Chapter 10: This is how my gothic band looks and Draco killed himself. ... 8D YAY!
Chapter 11: This is how I look and how I cried. < .< And Lupin and Snape videotaped me naked and Hagrid turned out to be also a Satanist and is in love with me.
WHAT THE HELL?! XD I laughed so hard at so many parts it's so rediculious.
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12.25.2009 - 17:48 | Slayzzer
Wow... I am pretty sure i just lost another bit of my sanity by hearing this... this... i don't know what to name this text you read, Sage. I listened to the whole reading in this video just because i wanted to prove to someone i know that i was brave enough to hear it all. Now i am one step closer to being completly nuts!
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12.25.2009 - 17:49 | ThatChickWithTheGoggles
I'm just glad she took the time out to tell us all exactly what she was wearing right down to the nail polish because... LORD her visual style is just a nod to the power of the English language.
Though honestly... I think she should try wearing the torn up black mini skirt with the TANK TOP with some kind of corset stuff all down the back and stuff. It would just be so cool.
FANGS so much for reading us this awesome fanfiction, Sage....................g et it? I said FANGS cause I'm so effing goth.
Now excuse me, I feel a little depressed... I think I'll go cut my wrists... but just a little, you know, just so I can feel?
MCR RULES!!!!1
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12.25.2009 - 18:18 | The Z
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12.25.2009 - 18:05 | Leifonuss
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12.25.2009 - 18:11 | Treima6You have no idea the amount of pain you have caused me, Sage.
I actually screamed when she brought up the Marilyn Manson bath towel.
The pain...the pain...


... okay, maybe Glenn Beck and Al Franken could.